moving out.
One day in a village of a hundred people + all lived together in place with a leader called john
then one day a normal guy named bob wanted to challenge him so he could become leader
because he was not happy about how things worked around hear and his wife called marther
agreed and so did bobs brother jim. And the leader of the village jon gave him a chance to go
back to how it was before or challenge him and if bob loses he will have to leave with his family
or be executed and if bob wins he will be rightfully be called leader of the villedge. And if you
guessed that he will challenge him you were correct. So bob and jone both got ready to fight.
Face to face bob and jone were both so ready marther was getting a bit worried but still heard
him on, then they hard 3, 2, 1, fight bob wasn't ready for it and bob got swept off his feet to the
ground, “crack” bob had broken his ankle and could fight no more and he had agreed on the
fight so he could no longer un do it so thay had to move out on the seas were they would mostly
die but a deal is a deal so they were forced to go with some fishing rods worms and luck that
they would survive and when Marther just had a new baby boy it made life harder.
then one day a normal guy named bob wanted to challenge him so he could become leader
because he was not happy about how things worked around hear and his wife called marther
agreed and so did bobs brother jim. And the leader of the village jon gave him a chance to go
back to how it was before or challenge him and if bob loses he will have to leave with his family
or be executed and if bob wins he will be rightfully be called leader of the villedge. And if you
guessed that he will challenge him you were correct. So bob and jone both got ready to fight.
Face to face bob and jone were both so ready marther was getting a bit worried but still heard
him on, then they hard 3, 2, 1, fight bob wasn't ready for it and bob got swept off his feet to the
ground, “crack” bob had broken his ankle and could fight no more and he had agreed on the
fight so he could no longer un do it so thay had to move out on the seas were they would mostly
die but a deal is a deal so they were forced to go with some fishing rods worms and luck that
they would survive and when Marther just had a new baby boy it made life harder.
Later that day they had left and already started fishing because they did not have breakfast
funnily. 30 minutes later they had cough 3 snapper and a couple other types of fish and 1 little
shark that they didn't need after a wiley they could not see land and it was getting dark and the
only food source that had were the raw fish and leftover worms, but they had to eat something
so they ate some of the raw fish. Buy the time it was dark they were all exhausted and the little
boy that they named lil timmy was fast asleep raped in blankets and they started to think that
would not survive the night. In the morning they woke up to a big shock to see another island
they paddled and paddled till they were there as they were getting there they all decided a good
job for each other so Martha would stay near the boat and look after lil tim and get some
metereil for shelter and bob would go find some water and jim would go find food. Buy the
time it was getting dark Marther had made a shelter and bob found a fresh water and jim
found fresh fruit. And were they stayed it got more upgraded and upgraded and they all lived
a good life the end.
funnily. 30 minutes later they had cough 3 snapper and a couple other types of fish and 1 little
shark that they didn't need after a wiley they could not see land and it was getting dark and the
only food source that had were the raw fish and leftover worms, but they had to eat something
so they ate some of the raw fish. Buy the time it was dark they were all exhausted and the little
boy that they named lil timmy was fast asleep raped in blankets and they started to think that
would not survive the night. In the morning they woke up to a big shock to see another island
they paddled and paddled till they were there as they were getting there they all decided a good
job for each other so Martha would stay near the boat and look after lil tim and get some
metereil for shelter and bob would go find some water and jim would go find food. Buy the
time it was getting dark Marther had made a shelter and bob found a fresh water and jim
found fresh fruit. And were they stayed it got more upgraded and upgraded and they all lived
a good life the end.
what a good story and maybe add some more full stops!!!! i really liked the first paragraph
ReplyDeletei liked your story it was interesting and i
ReplyDeletedont think that you need to do eneything better
idk