One day at mid afternoon a guy named Gary went out on his small little boat that he had named Tracey his only friend. As he got on his boat Tracey he turned on the motor and headed far until he could just see the misty land which he lives on. As he was sitting down he saw a dark gloomy figure heading straight towards him he wasn't too worried at the start, for he goes out all the time a gets up close with the wildlife such as wales, dolphins, sharks and seals. So he had a good look at it and was thinking it was a great big whale at the start but as it got closer and closer it became more clear it was not a whale. But what was this giant creature. And as the creature got closer it kinda looked more like a giant stingray Gary raced to his camera and grabbed it and as he turned around to take a photo of this big beast disappeared like it wasn't even there. But was it ever there in the first place or is it all in his head?
Hi Nelly I thought your story was interesting and funny, But i think your could add more descriptive words and punctuation.
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